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Word choice: I think I've used as some descriptive words that I think of. Some of the parts,I have Dead words so it's kinda boring.
All of the words are just really common use everyday, nothing special.
Sentence Fluency: Most of my sentences flow well. The majority of the sentences' beginnings are quite different.
Like I use "After that" and "because"
Organization: I divided my entry into different paragraphs with the same idea but more details on the second paragraph. The first paragraph shows the introduction what will we do. The second paragraphs give other memories that I had during the trip. The last sentence is the feelings of me in the trip. I think I summarized the events the best that I could so that, so it's doesn't have to be that long.
Proofreading: There some grammar mistakes in theses paragraphs because I didn't use grammar check but Spelling I did spell-check too. Each Paragraphs is a new things to read. So it's more interesting for you....... I think I could have a 9.5/12 (I think)
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